June for Juniors should be all about getting their college essays, or personal statements, completed. Some students love the idea of writing their mini autobiography but the vast majority dread it. Whether you love to write or hate to write, if you are applying to college, you have to do it and getting it done early will make you feel better come August 1 when the Common App opens, and you can confidently say you have most of the hardest work out of the way.
To get to what makes a successful college essay, I am going to share what makes a bad college essay first. Essentially, you want to stay away from the tired, cliché, boring topics that admissions readers see every day. After reading tens of thousands of essays each season, you don’t want your essay to be like all the others and make a reader exclaim, “if I see one more essay about sports injuries, I am going to scream!”
Topics to avoid:
- The trip (“I had to adjust to a new culture…” “I tried kimchi for the first time…”)
- The injury (“After my knee injury in 10th grade, things were not the same…”)
- My favorite things (“I love anime and science class…”)
- The pageant prompt (“I think World Peace is an important issue…”)
- Tales of glory (“Winning that race was the best feeling…”)
- The athlete (“Soccer means the world to me…” “Football teaches teamwork.”)
- The autobiography (“My name is Sam. I am a senior taking 8 AP courses...”)
- Pet death (“Cosmo was my buddy and confidant…”)
- My hero (“My grandfather was amazing. My dad is my hero.”)
But these topics are what everyone says to write about. Why are these bad ideas?
Although a debilitating injury is an important story and says a lot about how you move on and overcome obstacles and your mission trip in 8th grade was eye-opening and awesome, everyone writes about these things and your story will get lost in the noise. Unless you can find a creative, interesting angle on the topic, you simply won’t stand out. Writing about your grandma (or dad or mom or uncle) is a story about your grandma (or dad or mom or uncle) and says nothing about you. The personal statement is your only opportunity to stand out in the entire admissions process and the opportunity to help the committee see you as an individual not just another applicant. It should show a college the kind of person you are and your character. That can be kind, honest, creative, daring, or even sarcastic. Remember the Common App lists all your activities, awards, and honors, so they know you love soccer and you won the state title and you took 17 AP Classes with 5s on all. What they don’t know is who you are as person. That is who they choose, not the stats. Everyone has stats.
Your job is to think about what makes you unique, what admirable traits you have, and share information that will make someone say, “You have to read this essay. This is so interesting.” Is that easy to do? No, but all of us have a good story to tell. It doesn’t have to be elaborate or awe inducing. It can be a very simple, well-written description of something seemingly small and unimportant to most people that you can make great. How do you find those gem stories? Tune in for July’s follow-up article: “How can I write an outstanding college essay?”









